Untimely thaw
Above an unseen fire that fills the earthwith heat, my neighbor digs a winter grave, throwing its steaming soil against the bedof his black pickup truck. This warmth won't last:he sees it dissipate,...
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That must have been an eerie scene, Tom. I like the parallel metrical shifts in lines 9 and 11 and the dissolute rhyme for the first two quatrains. The shift to a more standard pattern helps to mark...
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HiI'm still absorbing this one - but wanted to mention that the couplet really confused me. The commas are placed such that I can't tell what phrase is modifying what. My hunch is that the last line...
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Hi Tom -Amazing imagery here. I decided the 'winter' referred to would be a comparatively mild one, with the frost level not much below the surface...I also wonder about " the dearth of comprehension...
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Thank you for your confusion. I thought it was fairly clear, but that's why we ask others to comment. Let me respond so I can see what I need to fix.1) Melody, you make a good point about the shaky...
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